Too long and complex. Most people will quit reading after one or two sentences. Keep it short.
Unfortunately although you seem sincere people really do not care about your life. They are looking for a service. Tell them you have it.
Examples are a waste of time.
If they give you a shot they do not care what you are doing with it as long as their problem is gone.
Try to show them what is in it for them.
Example:
Concept Recyclers
"Our mission is to recycle 100% of your unwanted items."
Give us a call XXX-XXX-XXXX you will be glad you did.
Always play it from the angle of what you can do for them.
Good Luck and may the best be with you.
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